Unique Landscape And Pool Company

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I remember standing in my living room. I was trying to decide where to hang my new painting of the summer sunset at the beach. It was a magnificent portrait of the landscape that I was able to visit once or twice a year. I marvelled at my own work. I know it sounds conceded, but it looked as though it were a photograph. I found the perfect place, right above the small kitchen window.

I gently set the framed painting on the loveseat before walking to my room to grab the hammer and nail I needed. As I entered the cluttered room, I found my hammer, yet the nail was no where in sight. I sighed in annoyance. I began looking for the nail when suddenly I realized something was different about my room. I stood up and looked around. Every scattered item was still where it was, my bed was still an untidy mess, yet something was wrong. Something seemed out of place. The room was gradually getting darker. I looked out the window and saw storm clouds rolling across the sky at alarming speeds. I gritted my teeth and clenched my fists so tight that my knuckles were white.

"P’ragti scientists," I cursed under my breath. I normally didn’t swear like that, but I hated the scientists. They were always tampering with the planets atmosphere like it was some kind of toy and the Coalition just stood by and watched!

I wondered what they were planning to use their weather machine for today. Would it be to fill the canal, or to make a land hurricane? Who cares? Those inconsiderate L’rendons would do something to win over the farmers one way or another. The darkening sky grew black as pitch. Though this used to terrify people, they soon learned that this caused cooling. It was summer and summers were always hot in the desert. The artificial farms tainted the deserts of Arizona after the Coalition came into power.

"Eric?" someone called from within the dark house. I turned to where the voice had come from.

"I’ll be there in a minute, hun," I responded. My darling wife was terrified of the dark almost as much as I was of the Fuhrer.

"Eric!?" she said louder. There was a tone of panic that laced her voice.

"I’m coming," I called to her. As I found my way through my room, I stopped only to find that I had walked into a wall. My chest hit the scanner. I sighed in relief and reached down to press my thumb to the scanner and when I did, the lights flickered to life. I heard a scream of absolute terror. My heart tried to jump out of me as I ran towards my wife. "Julia!? Julia, what’s wrong!? I was too engrossed in my quest to find my beloved that I didn’t notice the blood stains on the arcaidia door. I ran into her room and what I saw made me scream too.

A corpse hung from the roof by what appeared to be it’s own legs. It was Julia. I couldn’t hear my scream over a loud rushing sound. I suddenly realized that the rumors were true. The Coalition scientists had been working on the A.T.D. (Atmospheric Transportaional Device) for years and they had completed it. I knew exactly where I was. They had succeeded in opening the portal between earth and… hell…
Thank you avid reader!

Yes, my grammar is not all that great. I am in a computer class and didn’t have a lot of time to edit. And yes I should have expanded a little more on the science part and been more specific about whether or not he was… a he.

Sorry readers!

wow so far an 8 or 9, is it bad that i expected some really lame story and to rate it a 3 or something. it was surprisingly good and original i mean i read it all the way through unlike most of these type questions. i want to read more! argh you have me hooked!. are you not worried posting this may let people rob this amazing concept you have come up with? but yeah keep writing please you have to finish it.

oh and i nearly forgot as a number one fan and critic of your book so far i think i deserve the first copy of this best seller don’t you?